The weird thing, abortion rights doesn’t seem like the kind of issue that fundraising would really sway one way or another. I don’t think advertising or lobbying is going to have a significant impact. Maybe I’m not privy to wear all the money goes for fundraising.

I like the way you think

I should have already known it but because I didn’t and I looked it up, so I’ll go ahead and post it here in case anyone else doesn’t know:

Burkina Faso is a landlocked country located in West Africa. It is bordered by six countries: Mali to the north and west, Niger to the east, Benin to the southeast, Togo and Ghana to the south, and Côte d’Ivoire (Ivory Coast) to the southwest. Its capital city is Ouagadougou, which is also the largest city. The country’s geographical position places it within the Sahel region, where the Sahara desert transitions into the savanna

Putting a tariff on Chinese electric car inports is fine, but the governments need to get off their collective asses and pump the digital accelerator on native companies expanding their electric lines. Let’s take the income from those tariffs and apply it directly to rebates on locally manufactured ev.

These are deep red areas, they were told that COVID was bullsijt and then some people died but not them. They’re told that solar and wind power and electric cars are a scam, They were told that global warming is a scam. So after all this why believe that anything is going to have an effect on you.

The loss of life is horrible. This is maybe, If we’re lucky, The turning point where people actually start to believe warnings again. Of course for the most part, it was only the people in low-lying areas that died. This means there is a equal chance that they’ll just claim it’s another case of them versus us and it was their fault for buying or building that close to water.

Vulnerable to 20,000 misconfigurations, But thearted by 42 billion different simple checks that we all do anyway.

5 minute load greater than 80% of the number of cores? That’s an alarm…

He would take a bite out of crime

Like everything else, if it’s worth doing it’s probably worth self hosting.

Can we start at the bottom of your list and work our* way up?

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Omg did you pull those out of… Dude wash those off first…

When you grow that third arm the production will increase by half by default…

I’m with her, she lost all that weight to date Bigfoot and now California says it’s just a bear.

To be honest I think she should go with the trend and choose the bear.

Well his primary goal is to be a science communicator. His first problem is that he’s trying to fill Carl Sagan’s shoes which is a tall order by itself. Sagan was pretty amazing but most of his bread and butter were describing molecular processes with analogies. Telling you why a rubber band is stretchy in a truly relatable way is awesome. His second problem is that in the quantum realm we have tons of observation about what things do but very little information about why they do them. Most of our smartest explanations are simply describing the math that would make our observations possible. And there’s generally no way to analogize that. When you try to explain superposition to the lay person, You’re both going to have a bad time.

I figure there’s something we don’t understand about the nature of the universe that makes quantum and gravity and dark matter all make sense at every scale. We’ll probably figure it out eventually if we don’t nuke ourselves back to fighting with rocks and sticks.

Doctor Who recently as well, and Fall; or, Dodge in Hell by Stephenson

There’s probably a boatload of it in books.

There’s no doubt she had bad intentions. The government is full of people with bad intentions. Taken at face value, somewhere between 40% and 60% of the US has bad intentions. Does that mean we’re almost half evil or that a lot of us are programmed horribly?

My father, born and raised in Appalachia, was born into racism. Met a black guy, he was nice to my dad. Over the years my dad liked him and considered him a friend. Years later he recounts that this guy was one of the good N’s. JFC dad, where do I start? It’s not that an entire race of people is bad; you’ve been lied to your whole life and watch news that perpetuates that lie. It’s the same overall story with an Indian guy from work who shared some of his family’s curry with him. “He’s one of the good ones…” He votes with the republicans because of “all these horrible minorities waving flags on top buildings”. He’s only ever met a couple and says they’re good. He’s not evil, he’s just been lied to his whole life and has never been exposed to enough minorities to get de-programmed. Would he throw a box of democratic votes in the river if no one was looking? His friends, neighbors, and politicians are telling him he’s going to get overrun and shot by minorities if the left keeps winning. He might. Thankfully, he’ll never be in that position, but their programming is intensely strong.

Would it be trouble to ask you to clarify?

I can’t wrap my head around "There are already causes of action for this sort of thing "

That’s horrifying. Assuming identities without permission is going to continue to be a problem going forward.

On the same note, how cool would it be to train a LLM on everything you know and you’re speech patterns and how you feel about things so that descendants could have a somewhat informed conversation with you.

I totally agree, for her that’s likely a life sentence. I wonder if there isn’t some form of psychiatric help some of these people could benefit from. They’re all deeply brainwashed. Subjecting them to the people who have been portrayed so long as the enemy might change some minds. Though, I don’t know that I’d want to subject minorities to them.

Yes, it didn’t re-sort by default. You can, however, hide based on score. so kinda?

They also used to (maybe they still do) have meta-moderation where you could flag things as funny or insightful. I always considered that a nice touch but it didn’t allow sorting either. .

I usually wouldn’t take the time to dissect and explain the issues I have with someone’s writing, but since you’re posting this on multiple platforms and called it an “effort piece”, I assume you’re looking to gain readers and for positive feedback. I misread the article and got upvoted by others who also didn’t read it fully, so I feel obliged to offer some help and encouragement. Ironically, this will end up being long and boring, but it’s meant for you, not for general readers.

Starting with setting the stage is usually a good approach, but nine paragraphs is too long before getting to your point. You need an early hook to keep readers interested.

The first sentence of the second paragraph is missing a word. It reads as if the people are the rage. Also, “whoever” is used for a subject and “whomever” for non-subject usage. Consider starting with “For whomever” to clarify the subject has yet to come. It’s a minor grammatical error, but it makes readers re-read the sentence to understand it. This isn’t a big deal, but it’s early in the article, and the text is lengthy with no point or summary in sight. Many readers will just close it and upvote someone who half-read it (like me).

I skimmed down to the bullet points, assuming the earlier paragraphs were a detailed history I already knew, and the points would be concise. But terms like “executive costs” and “discoverability was too onerous” make readers think too much about their meanings. You should make your points clearly and use simple language, like early high school or late middle school dialects. After making your point clear, you can elaborate further, perhaps even get a little flowery. Remember, this is a non-technical post for the general public, so it should be easy to read if you want it to be popular.

In the first set of bullet points, in #2, you start a subset with (1) but never follow up with (2). This makes readers feel like they missed something and adds to the difficulty of reading.

After your first set of bullet points, you returned to your chronological account, then broke into another set of bullet points. It’s not clear that you’re setting up a contrast here. Including a line like “in contrast” would help readers follow your thought process and transition more smoothly.

At the end of your second set of bullet points, you reference the 4th item from the first set, which makes readers think they missed #4 from the second set. It would be better and more readable to add a #4 to the second set and include the concepts in that paragraph.

I agree with the ideas you present, but it’s hard to grasp them with so many snags in the article. Proofreading it out loud might help. If English isn’t your first language, it might not help as much. I ran it through Grammarly, but it can’t fix the context issues I’m mentioning here. It catches a lot of the easier errors, but most of its recommendations don’t improve the thoughts you’re trying to convey.

Running your opening paragraphs through a readability calculator, your average score is “very difficult” to “extremely difficult.” This isn’t ideal for a weblog opinion piece. If you were writing a technical document or research paper, it would be fine, but for general consumption (which IMO is where this piece belongs), you should simplify it. Think of a New York Times article. The piece i’m writing here to you will gauge as very difficult as well, but that’s to be expected on an instructional piece.

As much as you might hate this suggestion, please try it: Run your drafts through an LLM like GPT-4/Copilot with the prompt “make this simpler [your text here].” Don’t just copy and paste what it says, but look at the changes in wording and see where the changes are significant. This can help make your writing more approachable.

Here’s an example

Yours:

“Whoever didn’t like the real-time nature of the IRC livechat, forums were all the rage and I admit they had a wonderful charm for the upcoming teenager who wanted to express themselves with fancy signatures and some name recognition for their antics. Each forum was a wonderful microcosm, a little community of people with a similar hobby and/or mind-frame.”

Theirs:

“For those who didn’t like the real-time nature of IRC live chat, forums were very popular. They had a special charm for teenagers who wanted to express themselves with fancy signatures and gain some recognition. Each forum was a small community of people with similar hobbies and mindsets.”

I’d take the advice up to the first comma, take out upcoming it’s not pertinent, add in gain, for the sake of readability, I’d take out microcosm, it’s a proper term, but it’s just duplicating the same thought and really doesn’t add to the comprehension or visuals while making it harder to read.

Mine:

“For those who didn’t like the real-time nature of the IRC live chat, forums were all the rage. and I admit they had a wonderful charm for teenagers who wanted to express themselves with fancy signatures and gaine some name recognition for their antics. Each forum was a wonderful little community of people with a similar hobbies and mindsets”

Also of note: maybe do lay into every person who gives you negative criticism, If your goal is to have people read your thoughts, some of these people may have viable critiques or real misunderstandings you can adjust your writing style for and draw a more substantial audience.

Best of luck!